Paragraph writing - Jane Schaffer method - example 2

Thesis
Global warming is a problem that can no longer be ignored but it is also a problem with many solutions.

Topic sentence / statement (TS)
Global warming is a world problem.

Concrete detail sentence (CD)
If it is not stopped, many experts believe that the world may be drastically hurt.

Commentary (CM)
(CM1) For example, in the movie "Inconvenient Truth", Gore presents many graphs to explain how the earth will be harmed if nothing is done about it (Gore, 2004).
(CM2) These graphs show that pollution from cars and industry are the biggest contributors to global warming.

Concluding Sentence (CS)
(CS1) As a result, we must all begin to solve the problem of global warming now and not tomorrow.
(CS2) It must begin with a look at ways to reduce pollution from cars and industry.

Paragraph

Global warming is a world problem. If it is not stopped, many experts believe that the world may be drastically hurt. For example, in the movie "Inconvenient Truth", Gore presents many graphs to explain how the earth will be harmed if nothing is done about it (Gore, 2004). These graphs show that pollution from cars and industry are the biggest contributors to global warming. As a result, we must all begin to solve the problem of global warming now and not tomorrow. It must begin with a look at ways to reduce pollution from cars and industry.

Paragraph writing - Jane Schaffer method - example 1

Thesis
The story of Cinderella is about a woman who goes through many stages in life

Topic Sentence (TS)
The story starts with Cinderella leading a miserable life.

Concrete Detail (CD)
For example, she does all the cooking, cleaning, and sewing.

Commentary (CM1)
This shows that she feels taken advantage of by her selfish stepmother and stepsisters.

Commentary (CM2)
This is important because her horrible life gives her a present, her fairy godmother.

Concluding Sentence (CS)
As a result, her fairy godmother has no trouble convincing her to leave her work and to become a princess.

As a Paragraph

The story starts with Cinderella leading a miserable life. For example, she does all the cooking, cleaning, and sewing. This shows that she feels taken advantage of by her selfish stepmother and stepsisters. This is important because her horrible life gives her a present, her fairy godmother. As a result, her fairy godmother has no trouble convincing her to leave her work and to become a princess.

Note taking - examples

Interesting to discover a variety of links on the internet that either
explain different styles of note taking or provide specific examples of note taking done by students.

Check out this list of links for details.

Styles of note taking

• Englishcompanion.com

Note taking examples

• About Memory

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Sample Outline

This is a sample outline that I found on the internet. It shows the sorting of information according to main ideas, and supporting ideas. It is NOT globalization essay but it does show you the general organization, you need to realize in your own outlines.

The Conquest of Mt. Everest

1. Introduction
2. Background Information (used to introduce new or important terms - for almost all of you it will mean explaining "globalization" and the question that you are answering)
   
   1. Location of Mt. Everest
   2. Geography of the Surrounding Area
   3. Facts about Mt. Everest
      1. Height of the mountain
      2. How the mountain was named
         1. Peak XV
         2. Joloungma (Tibetan name)
         3. Sagarmatha (Nepalese name)
      3. The number of people who have climbed Everest to date
3. Major Explorers Covered in this Paper
   1. Sir Edmund Hillary
      1. First to reach the summit (1953)
      2. Led a team of experienced mountain climbers who worked together
   2. Tenzing Norgay and the Sherpas
      1. Norgay was an experienced climber and guide who accompanied Hillary
      2. Sherpas still used to guide expeditions
   3. Rob Hall
      1. Leader of the failed 1996 expedition
      2. Led group of (mainly) tourists with little mountain climbing experience
4. The Impact Expeditions have had on Mt. Everest and Local Community
   1. Ecological Effects
      1. Loss of trees due to high demand for wood for cooking and heating for tourists.
      2. Piles of trash left by climbing expeditions
   2. Economic Effects
      1. Expedition fees provide income for the country
      2. Expeditions provide work for the Sherpas, contributing to the local economy.
   3. Cultural Effects
      1. Introduction of motor vehicles
      2. Introduction of electricity
5. Conclusion

Source

Ferber, A. (n.d.). Sample Essay Outlines - TeacherVision.com. TeacherVision. Retrieved March 8, 2009, from http://www.teachervision.fen.com/writing/essays/1779.html.